送交者: 虎下吴 于 January 23, 2010 20:52:02:
去年念九年级的女儿写了一首诗登在了校刊上并获了奖。 我看了以后觉得很不错。便试着翻成中文。一为鼓励女儿写作和学习中文，二来也算拉拢感情。 自己过去也看过几本翻译的中文诗集，如普希金的。看时总感觉不少地方翻译得别扭。这次自己来翻译，方知其大不易。原意，文采和诗的韵律，哪一面都要照顾。常常会顾此失彼。真是出力不讨好的营生。硬着头皮总算翻完了。读来似乎不少地方词不达意，取舍欠妥。想想又不是自己原作，何必那么认真。这里一起贴出，套一句文革流行用语：欢迎批评指正。
白玫瑰与夜莺
白玫瑰和夜莺，
一个属於花的世界，
一个属於鸟的王国，
两者似乎永远走不到一起。
但是夜莺是如此爱恋着白玫瑰，
每天都会向她飞去。
他围绕着白玫瑰上下飞舞，
唱着动听的爱情之曲。
白玫瑰缩回她的花瓣，
似乎惧怕夜莺的追求。
其实她对爱的渴望同夜莺一样，
是自然之王的法令使她畏惧。
勇敢的夜莺并不气馁，
他依然每天来对白玫瑰歌唱。
歌声是那么真诚执著，
饱含冲破大自然樊篱的勇气。
白玫瑰的心终於被征服，
她张开了自己的花瓣，
去拥抱夜莺美丽的歌声，
一束红玫瑰便诞生在这结合里。
浪漫的故事， 不是吗？
让我们重新开始，想象什么会发生：
如果夜莺是个才华横溢但出身低微的歌手，
如果白玫瑰是位高贵而优雅的仕女，
如果隔开他们的不是大自然的界限，
而是社会地位的悬殊分离？
如果白玫瑰的花瓣最终没有绽开，
如果爱情最终输给了对地位的忧虑，
尽管夜莺全身心地唱着对白玫瑰的挚爱，
只是这一次，故事没有一个幸福的结局。
The White Rose and the Nightingale
The white rose and the nightingale.
Two things never meant to be.
The white rose a flower and the nightingale
a bird.
But the nightingale so dearly
loved the white rose, and every day it
would descend and sing its warbling songs
of love.
The white rose would shrink away, not afraid
of love ━ for it too, loved the nightingale ━ but of
nature’s retribution.
Still the nightingale was determined
to woo the white rose. It sang of defiance against
natural law, it sang of a vast love that would not be
restrained
by
boundaries.
Soon, the white rose was won over, and it opened
its petals, blooming to the beauty of the
nightingale’s song.
And from that union was born the
Red
Rose.
Romantic, no?
Now, let us rewind and go back
a bit. What if?
There was a separation of status. The white rose,
with her beauty and grace, was a fine noblewoman.
The nightingale, a lowly, but talented,
musician.
What if?
They were separated now not only
by nature’s law,
but by a very clear and pronounced
social
status.
And what if this time?
The white rose was not willing to return
the ardent love of the pleading nightingale, so concerned
was she by her high ranking.
Besotted nightingale still sang of a love greater
than life itself ━ poured heart and soul into
dedication to the one who had
captured him.
Only this time, this story doesn’t have such a
happy
ending.